脚本家Philippa Boyens さんあてに、私の個人名で嘆願書を出します。
私では英語の文章を書けないのと、監督・ＮＬあて署名嘆願書の援護射撃の意味で早く出したいため、字幕改善連絡室作成のＰＪ監督あて嘆願書を流用させていただきました。また、気持ちとしては改善室同志を代表して、というつもりでもあります。

差出人を個人としたことに整合するよう文章を一部直しました。また、追伸に自分独自の意見を入れてみましたが、これで文法的に正しいのかどうか大変不安です。
チェックをよろしくお願いいたします。
投函日は一応、９月１５日が目標です。

＃以下、嘆願書本文です＃

（My adress）

September 15 ,2002



Ms. Philippa Boyens
c/o Wingnut Production
PO Box 15-208
Miramar　Wellington
New Zealand


Dear Ms. Philippa Boyens,
This is a petition from a Japanese fan of your film ”The Lord of the Rings: The Fellowship of the Ring”, concerning its Japanese subtitles.

（If you have already read a message like this, let me apologize for bothering you again. My friends and I are sending letters with the same contents respectively, so that one of them may reach you.）

The film has achieved a considerable international success, also in Japan. Unfortunately however, my friends and I strongly believe that inaccurately translated subtitles distort what you and ultimately what J.R.R. Tolkien have created. I ask you to refer to the list of most serious errors attached at the end of this petition.

We learned that you and co-writers spent two to three years to complete the script of ”The Lord of the Rings” with due and profound respect to the original work. Nevertheless, the Japanese translator, who is a well-known creator of subtitles for foreign films, but who admits she has hardly read the novels, has been allowed to spoil your endeavour. Some of the Japanese subtitles are not true to the original script, and the errors are unrelated to the number-of-letters restriction (Japanese subtitles have limits on the number of letters per length of each scene). Unavoidably, in significant parts of the film, wrong interpretations of the storyline and the character-settings are forced upon the audience. Yet the fact remains that most Japanese rely on the subtitles when they watch foreign films.

As soon as "The Lord of the Rings: The Fellowship of the Ring" was released in Japan, concerns were raised that downright and inexcusable errors in the subtitles should be corrected. These resulted in 1281 signatures for a petition on the Internet which were sent to Nippon Herald Films Inc., the Japanese distributor, late in May. The reply, or rather a notice, was then posted on the Japanese official website of the film in early June. We found this announcement unacceptable: it did not contain a single word of apology for mistranslation, and nowhere was expressed any intention to revise the errors. It merely mentioned that the subtitles in DVD/VHS will be revised, reasoning that the corrections will be possible this time out of simple technical reasons, the number-of-letters restriction being less strict in these media. To our great disappointment, we found that they decided to hire the same translator for the forthcoming "The Two Towers" and "The Return of the King".

My friends and I prepared this petition, wishing to bring this deadlock to an end. It is now obvious that Nippon Herald will not admit their fault, despite the criticisms from the audience. We are also sending a petition to Mr. Peter Jackson and New Line Cinema, Inc. along the same line.

We sincerely hope that a translator who honours your achievement and Tolkien's original work, and an authorized supervisor for translation are hired for the Japanese subtitles of the succeeding two films, "The Two Towers" and "The Return of the King".

Sincerely yours,

(My signature)



p.s.
A group of people, faithful readers of Tolkien and admirers of your film, have worked on this petition. They allow anyone who agrees with them to send the same petition individually, in the hope of drawing your attention.
I have read the original books since I was a child (of cource in Japanese translation). Many years I dreamed that this wonderful story would be a film. I appreciate your brilliant achievement that made it came true. Therefor I do personally wish to see a proper translation for your "the Lord of the Rings" films, and I took the chance to do something myself.

＃この後ろに誤訳リストが付きます＃


変更点
１．宛名
住所は監督と同じWingnut Production気付けで送る

２．日本のファンからの
from Japanese fans of your film
→　from a Japanese fan of your film（個人で出すのでfanは単数形）

３．個人送付用付加文　全く同じメッセージ→同じメッセージ
a message exactly like this
→　a message exactly like this（exactlyを削除）

４．私たち署名者は確信している→友人達と私は確信している
we, the undersigned, strongly believe that
→　my friends and I strongly believe that
（we をmy friends and Iに代える。　, the undersigned, は削除）

５．誤訳リストを参照してください
We ask you to refer
→ I ask you to refer（WeをＩに）

６．脚本作成に２，３年掛けたことを知っている
We learned that you have spent two to three years
→We learned that you and co-writers spent two to three years
（共同脚本であるのでyouをyou and co-writersに変える。have spentをspentに修正。
なお、Weは公知の事実というつもりで残した。以下の日本ヘラルドとのやり取りも同。）

７．日本語字幕のうちのいくつかが
Some Japanese subtitles
→Some of the Japanese subtitles（修正）

８．字幕は字数制限があること
each scene.)
→each scene). （修正　ピリオドはカッコの外）

９ ．ほとんどの日本人は字幕に頼る
most Japanese rely on the subtitles
→most Japanese rely on subtitles（修正。定冠詞削除）

１０．インターネット署名
a petition on the internet
→a petition on the Internet（修正。インターネットの頭文字Ｉを大文字に）

１１．DVDは修正されるだろう
the subtitles in DVD/VHS will be revised
→the subtitles in DVD/VHS would be revised（修正。時制の一致）

１２．行き詰まりを打開するために嘆願書を作成しました
We came to the conclision that making a petition directly to you is our last hope.
→My friends and I prepared this petition, wishing to bring this deadlock to an end.
（段落全体をＮＬあて嘆願書の文章に差し替え。WeをMy fiends and Iに代える。）

１３．監督とニューライン・シネマにも同趣旨の嘆願書を送っています
sending a petition to Mr. Peter Jackson
→sending a petition to Mr. Peter Jackson and New Line Cinema, Inc.
（and New Line Cinema, Inc.を付け加え）

「多数の監督ファンが嘆願書に署名したこと」は削除
Many of his fans showed interest in joining us, and 150 people so far have signed it, complete with their mames and addeesses.を削除

１４．個人送付用追伸
「署名付き嘆願書の送付に時間がかかる」は削除
and they mean to send it with a number of signatures to you. As it will take some time, however,
を削除。

drawing your attention sooner
→drawing your attention（soonerを削除）

差出人独自の意見を挿入
I have read the original books since I was a child (of cource in Japanese translation). Many years I dreamed that this wonderful story would be a film. I appreciate your brilliant achievement that made it came true.
私は子供の頃から原作を読んでいました（もちろん日本語訳で）。長年、この素晴らしい物語が映画になればいいなあと思っていました。それを実現してくださったあなたの輝かしい業績に感謝します。

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