発言者: ハーブ
発言日: 2002 11/12 18:28
完成稿のワンステップ前の段階です。470+478
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Examples of Remaining Mistranslations in DVD/VHS
>Keep It Secret, Keep It Safe (chapter 6)
Gandalf:
[script] There are some things that I must see to.
[subtitle] I have my business.
Frodo:
[script] What things?
[subtitle] What business?
Gandalf:
[script] Questions. Questions that need answering.
[subtitle] Many things. I have to finish them.
>The Shadow of the Past (chapter 8)
Gandalf:
[script] But through me, it would wield a power too great and terrible to imagine.
[subtitle] But its power is too terrible to imagine.
>The Council of Elrond (chapter 23)
Gandalf:
[script] I will help you bear this burden, Frodo Baggins. As long as it is yours to bear.
[subtitle] I will share the burden. I will be watching you.
>The Council of Elrond (chapter 23)
Boromir:
[script] Gondor has no king. Gondor needs no king.
[subtitle] A king for Gondor? We do not need one.
comment:These subtitles strongly give an impression that ☆the word 'king' is quite unfamiliar to Boromir, as if Gondor were a republic that had never known kingship.
>The Council of Elrond (chapter 23)
Boromir:
[script] If this is indeed the will of the council, then Gondor will see it done.
[subtitle] If this is the decision of the council, Gondor will obey it.
>A Journey in the Dark (chapter 28), The Road Goes Ever On...(chapter 39)
Gandalf:
[script] So do all who live to see such times, but that is not for them to decide. All you have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to you.
[subtitle] Everyone feels that way when he's having a hard time, but you can't change it. What's more important for you is, to think what you should do at the moment.
NOTE: Only the subtitle for the latter part of the first line has been revised.
[subtitle in theater] Everyone feels that way when he's having a hard time, but it is too late to regret. ★
>Parth Galen (chapter 36)
Frodo:
[script] I know what you would say, and it would seem like wisdom, but for the warning in my heart.
[subtitle] Your words sound kind, but they mean warning to me.
>Parth Galen (chapter 36)
Boromir:
[script] We're all afraid, Frodo, but to let that fear drive us to destroy what hope we have. Don't you see, it's madness.
[subtitle] We're all afraid, but if we are overcome by fear, all will be lost. Don't forget it.
>Parth Galen (chapter 36)
Frodo:
[script] It has taken Boromir.
[subtitle] Boromir....
comment:The subtitler, Natsuko Toda, often does this with short sentences: She takes one single noun out of the line and adds a question mark, or else three dots. Another example is in the article of TheOneRing.Net; "Warning?"
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Such subtitles, needles to say, give audience little information and much confusion. But it does not occur to many that the fault is in the translation and not in the script itself.
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変更点
>The Council of Elrond (chapter 23)
☆the word 'king'に戻しました。
>「ボロミアの知的水準が貶められている」というずれた印象になるかも知れません。もっとも直後のas if節があるからこの心配は杞憂でしょうか。
いくら何でも「 king という単語を知らない」の意味には取れないと思う(unfamiliar to him は、「知識欠如」とは違う)ので、杞憂でしょう。ということで、前置詞の問題が拡大再生産されるのを避けたりして (^^;)
>A Journey in the Dark (chapter 28), The Road Goes Ever On...(chapter 39)
★劇場字幕2文目は全く同じ英文の繰り返しになるので省略しました。
>Parth Galen (chapter 36) 最後のコメント部分
★Evenstar 様[472]
>この点を白い都さまが強調されたいのであれば(中略)
>次の挿入文を考えてみました。
>These two cases are representative of this style of hers. Yet, they are just the tip of the iceberg.
今回は試してみた上で私の印象として「これはない方が簡潔で見やすいかも」と、入れてないですが、白い都様のご判断次第で上記ご提案いただいた2センテンスを
>Another example is in the article of TheOneRing.Net: "Warning?" に続ける形で
挿入したとしても何ら問題はないと思います。
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