大きな変更のお勧めはありません。


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> (2)
> You may already realize that "The Fellowship of the Ring (FotR)" fared so much worse than "Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone" at the box office only in Japan as CNN reported: "The whole worldwide difference last time was accounted for by Japan."

You may already realize that only in Japan did "The Fellowship of the Ring (FotR") fare so much worse than "Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone" at the box office....


> (3)
>"trilogy" and "The Fellowship of the Ring" were completely eliminated in the trailer for FotR.

they completly eliminated "trilogy" and "The Fellowship of the Ring" from the FotR trailer.


(5)
> In our opinion, there still remain a considerable number of bad translations, so we made "A List of Mistranslations in DVD/VHS", though inadequate it may be. The list is attached at the end of this letter.

, so this time we made "A List of....


> (7)
>Could you consider appointing an agent whose knowledge in Japanese language and whose judgement you can trust, to be involved in the subtitle-making and supervise the whole process?

Could you please consider...（このほうが、「可能性の打診」ではなく「要望」であるというトーンが出ますので。）


>Is it also possible that he/she examines the subtitles on FotR theatrical release (the papers enclosed), and also check up and evaluate the Japanese trailer for TTT available on the Japanese official movie website?

It is also advisable that he/she examines...　（これも「攻めの姿勢」の一端として）


> >(8)
> Contemplating the affair in its entirety, we have enough reasons to believe that it is against your interest to leave the issue of subtitle-making to the Japanese distributor and expect them to do their job. They failed you as your business partner last time. And they have not come up with any concrete solutions to the problem, let alone showing any signs to recognize its magnitude. We all dearly hope for a success of the next two installments of the trilogy in Japan, a success they naturally deserve.

（このままだとやや締めとして落ちつかないので、次の文をこのパラグラフの最後に追加してはどうでしょうか。）
The quality of subtitles will play a decisive role in bringing this about, as well as your interest in this matter.

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